ARGUMENT # 1
Digitalization has slowly become part of our daily lives throught out the years, in a way that one would've never dreamed of 10 years ago. It has affected how we actually live our daily lives, at school, home, work and other environments. This change has made us conform even more than back when TV's hadn't been invented or any other digital device was discovered. But even then there was ways people would conform but due to digitalization it has become worse. It has made it easier for us to conform making no one a real individual. The bad side of all this is we have become lazy letting it take over our lives which is making conformity worse.
A typical day in one's life begins with waking with an alarm, turning on TV to see the weather or news, then checking one's cell phone for calls, voicemail, texts or facebook updates. Then walk out house and turn on one's ipod and then begin texting friends until reach car or train or bike. Once get to work or school print out papers for class or meeting and so on. You might not do all this but if you notice some way or another digitalization affects our daily lives. In interviews i had with complete stranger asking them "In what ways does digital media interfere with your life?" Every single person I interviewed said a way digtial media affected them, no matter if in a bad or good way it still affected their lives. STILL WILL ADD MORE EVIDENCE
START OF ARGUMENT # 2
Conformity is when we change to fit in with the people around us, conformity has been happening ever since humans existed even before digitalization. Before one couldn't watch TV or internet to see latest trends because that didn't exist yet but we could still watch others and fit in with what everyone else was wearing. But do to the start of digitalization, conformity has become worse. Today we can watch TV or magazines to keep up with latests trends making it so much easier to conform to what celebs, actors, idols , and others are doing, wearing, and thinking (as in their ideas, views, and thoughts). WILL ADD MORE
OPPOSING VIEWPOINTS
why does it matter if conformity is getting worse if there is really no way to stand out because no matter how much we want to be an individual or different someone has already done it and maybe digital taking over our lives is goo
CONNECTIONS and SIGNIFICANCE
-connect to world
-connect to myself
- connect to movie
CONCLUSION
-will restate thesis and conclude my whole essay
Michelle,
ReplyDeleteI overall enjoyed reading your paper, as the topic really pulled me in. I liked how you described a general, daily life with digital devices. Your paper as a whole has great goals. As im sure you know, i think all you have to do is just expand your arguments more. Other than that great job.
Michelle,
ReplyDeleteI like the direction your paper is going in. I think that the evidence you still need to add will make your arguments even stronger.I think that maybe you should add a little introduction so that your thesis doesn't just hang there. I also think that you should check for minor errors like grammar to make sure that the sentences make sense when you read them out loud. Besides that I liked it so far.